1. Post your group's thesis statement here by hitting "post comment"
2. Include the names of both group members
3. Include your class period
4. Check back to see the suggestions to your thesis statement
2. Include the names of both group members
3. Include your class period
4. Check back to see the suggestions to your thesis statement
Student A
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Thesis Statement
Miranda Morgan
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Period 1
Thesis Statement
The decision to drop an atomic bomb on Hiroshima was unjustified because it increased war tensions and killed more than 100,000 innocent people.
Miranda and Leila,
DeleteGreat work! Add "President Truman's" to the beginning and "and Nagasaki" after Hiroshima.
Ms. Dyer
Rachel Edelstein Nicci Julian
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Based on our research from wikepedia, America was justified for dropping the atomic bombs on Hiroshima because Japan had bombed them first under no speculation, and it dragged America into war that they wanted to remain neutral in.
Rachel and Nicci,
DeleteChange to, " America was justified in dropping the atomic bombs on Hiroshima and Nagasaki because Japan bombed them first without warning, dragging America into a war in which they wanted to remain neutral."
Grant Dyer\
ReplyDeleteMichael Mendoza
Period 1
The United States was justified in making the horrid decision of dropping the atomic bombs on Japan because it was necessary to end the war, Japan was planning on bombing the U.S., and the Japanese already surprise attacked Pearl Harbor.
Greant and Michael,
DeleteThanks for the shout out!
Re-word the thesis this way: "The United States was justified in making the tough decision to drop the atomic bombs on Japan because it ended the war quickly saving american lives, and retaliated against the Japanese for their earlier attack on Pearl Harbor."
Sarina Shakouri and Kaitlyn Hoyt. Period 1.
ReplyDeleteThe dropping of the atomic bombs on Hiroshima and Nagasaki was justified because the United States had given Japan warning before the actions had taken place and more lives would have been lost if United States had chosen to invade Japan.
Sarina and Kaitlyn,
DeleteGreat work, add "the" between "if" and "United".
Alex Stoeffler
ReplyDeleteIan Wright
Period 1
America was justified in dropping the atomic bomb on Hiroshima and Nagasaki, Japan, because it ended the war in the Pacific, which was going on almost four years, and it saved the lives for many Americans.
Alex and Ian,
DeleteGreat work, Edit it to this:
"America was justified in dropping the atomic bombs on Hiroshima and Nagasaki, Japan because it ended the war in the Pacific and saved the lives of hundreds of thousands of Americans."
Summer Mersereau and Aubrey Cook
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The United States was justified to bomb Japan because Japan attacked us first and was not planning on stopping the war. "Atomic power can become a powerful influence towards the maintence of world peace." -President Truman in Truman Papers
Summer and Aubrey,
DeleteDo not include a quote in your thesis, but that quote with be great in your abstract and evidence page.
The first part of your thesis is good.
"The United States was justified in bombing Japan because they attacked first and had no intention of ending the war."
Shannon Reddy
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Period 1
The decsision to drop the atomic bomb on Hiroshima was justified with the intentions to end the war and save american lives, but after its failed attempt it increased war tensions and after all its destruction the second bombing in Nagasaki was unjustifiable.
Shannon and Alexa,
DeleteGood start!
Change too:
"The decision to drop the atomic bomb on Hiroshima was justified due to the United States' intentions to end the war quickly and save American lives. After the first bomb failed to end the war and the extent of it's destruction was known, the use of the atomic bomb on Nagasaki was unjustifiable."
Alyssa Mckown
ReplyDeleteYesenia Gutierrez
Period 1
Thesis Statement:
We feel that the dropping of the atmoic bomb on Hiroshima and Nagasaki was unjustified becasue they had many options insteads of bombing these people which lead into other wars instead of just stopping this one war. One of the options was to make an appeasment to settle disputs in a reasonable manner and to make certian agreements to not involve eachother. Another options would have been to just drop one on the bombs to warn them, and to get them to agree not to attack on us and to make agreements therefore we wouldnt have had to drop the second and or third one.
Alyssa and Yesenia,
DeleteGreat ideas, but lets condense to this:
"The dropping of the atomic bombs on Hiroshima and Nagasaki was unjustified because the U.S. had other options such as diplomacy and the invasion of Japan."
(you can't say one option was to just drop one and then get them to surrender because that is what we did - we dropped one and waited 3 days for them to surrender before dropping the second).
Paloma Rothschild
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Period 1
Thesis
The United States was unjustified in dropping the atomic bombs because it not only caused the deaths of hundreds of thousands of innocent lives, but it also opened the doors to destructive nuclear warfare in the future.
Paloma and Olivia,
DeleteGreat! just add "on Japan" after "atomic bombs"
Natalie Kaylor
ReplyDeleteCameron Foster
Period 1
Thesis Statement
The united states was unjustified in dropping the bomb because the number of people killed from the blasts and the subsequent damages that followed far exceeds any mission that may have been accomplished by this type of annihilation.
Natalie and Cameron,
DeleteGreat work, just change "bomb" to "bombs" and add "on Japan" after it.
Diana Hall and Mattie Jones
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The united states was justified to drop the atomic bombs on japan because we warned them before and they were with the intentions of ending the war.
Diana and Mattie,
DeleteGreat start, just change the end to make it more clear (also don't forget to CAPITALIZE) -
"The United States was justified in dropping the atomic bombs on Japan because the Japanese were warned ahead of time and the bombs ultimately ended the war in the Pacific."
Ryan Nagel
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Nathan Aguilar
period 1
The dropping of the atomic bomb was unjustified because the US already had the japanese surrounded, the radiation still affects Japan today, and it started the nuclear arms race.
Guys,
DeleteGreat ideas, but you need to work on your clarity.
"The dropping of the atomic bombs on Japan was unjustified because the cost outweighed the effects. Radiation still affects the people of Hiroshima and Nagasaki today, and the use of nuclear weapons started the nuclear arms race."
Natalee Linnes and Amanda Girvin
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Dropping the atomic bomb was justifiable because the Japanese surrendered, saving over
100,000 American soldiers and perhaps as many as 1,000,000 Japanese who would have died if we had invaded Japan.
Natalie and Amanda,
DeleteGreat work, change "bomb" to "bombs on Japan" and change the 100,000 to 500,000.
Cooper Clark
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period 1
The United States was justified to end the war and drop the atomic bomb in order to prevent casualties from the US, British, and the Japanese.
Cooper and Chris,
DeleteGreat work, change "bomb" to "bombs on Japan" and "larger" between "prevent" and "casualties".
Noah Gjertsen-Illig and Maryam Evini
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America was unjustified in dropping the atomic bombs on Hiroshima and Nagasaki because it killed thousands of innocent civilians, started the arms race, and cultivated fear of nucear threat in many countries.
Great work Noah and Maryam! You might want to add in something about the long term effects of the bombs (radiation).
DeleteHannah Ris and Rebecca Ficke
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The atomic bombs,dropped in 1945, by the direct order of president Truman were a smart decision to protect and save American lives. Due to the fact that the bombs had multiple purposes such as offering a warning to the Soviets and hopefully putting a timely end to a deadly war, America was able to justify their actions. A war originally provoked by the Japanese, America's actions were clearly justified by the main goal of saving American lives.
Hannah and Rebecca,
DeleteGood work, capitalize President, and change the second sentence to: "The bombs had multiple purposes such as offering a warning to the Soviets and bringing a timely end to a deadly war.
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Truman's decision to drop atomic bombs on both Hiroshima and Nagasaki was fully justified and without it thousands of American lives would have been lost in the future invasion of Japan
Period 3
DeleteMatt and David,
DeleteGreat! change "and" to "because" and "the" to "a".
Keenan Kudell, Connor Angioli, and Daniel Carpenter.
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America's decision in dropping the atomic bombs was justified because it ended the destruction that Japan was going to cause in the future, thus saving many American and foreign lives.
Keenan, Connor, and Daniel,
DeleteAdd "on Japan" after "bombs", otherwise great!
Hannah Schuyler
ReplyDeleteCarly Swift
Period 3
As a result of the atomic bombs dropped 1945, during World War II, was a direct demand of President Truman was unnecessary and unwise. In addition, Truman and his advisors had ulterior motives such as Amerinca engaging in "atomic diplomacy." Also, the bombings were used as a way to intimidate the Soviets. In addition, there was an aproximation of 120,000 deaths. As a result, America failed to consider effecient alternatives to dropping the atomic bombs.
Hannah and Carly,
DeleteYou need to edit for clarity:
"The atomic bombs dropped in 1945 on Japan was ultimately unnecessary and unwise because the bombings caused approximately 120,000 deaths, Truman and his advisors had ulterior motives such as engaging in "atomic diplomacy" with the Soviets, and Truman and his advisors failed to consider efficient alternatives to atomic warfare. "
Summer Franco
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Period 3
President Harry Truman's decision to drop atomic bombs Little boy, and Fat Man on Hiroshima and Nagasaki was unjustified. These atomic bombs caused over 100,000 Japanese citizens to loose their lives.
Summer and Gabrielle,
DeleteGood! Combine into one sentence with the transition word "because".
Noelle Goetz & Krista Paulsen
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In 1945 the first atomic bomb, nicknamed Little Boy, was dropped on the city of Hiroshima causing 70,000 citizens to instantly die. A few days later a secong bomb, nicknamed Fat Man, was dropped on the city of Nagasaki killing more than 30,000 innocent people instantly. Due to these extreme casualties and deaths, the dropping of the atomic bomb on Hiroshima and Nagasaki was completely unjustified because it devastated both cities by killing more 100,000 innocent civilians and the use of the bomb besmirched America's long lasting reputation.
Noelle and Krista,
DeletePerfect! No changes!
When the Japanese attacked Pearl Harbor, their intent was to bring the war onto US soil. This would have prolonged the war, depleted the US of money and resources, and kill many American lives (it is estimated that millions more Americans would have died if the war continued). Ultimately, Truman was justified in dropping the atomic bombs because he saved the country from chaos and economic trouble.
ReplyDeleteTaylor and Kaemi,
DeleteGreat work! Just change "kill" to "killed" and take out the parenthesis. You do not want to include parenthesis in a formal thesis statement.
Kyle Matthes
ReplyDeleteRafael Gomez
period 3
The US did not need to drop the two atom bombs on Hiroshima and Nagasaki. Though this action caused a turning point in the war against Japanese forces, it killed 80,000 innocint civilians and destroying 90 persent of the city.
Kyle and Rafael,
DeleteGreat! Just change "destroying" to "destroyed".
Stuart Nealon
ReplyDeleteAndrew Vetter
period 3
The United States decision to drop the atomic bomb on Japan was completely justified because it brought a swift end to the war and saved many American lives.
Stuart and Andrew,
DeleteGood, just don't forget to punctuate States'.
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The desicion that President Truman made to drop the atomic bombs on Hiroshima and Nagasaki was the right descions because it saved many allied forces lives even though it killed many innocent Japanese people.
Jake and Izzy,
DeleteGood job, change to "The decision that President Truman made to drop the atomic bombs on Hiroshima and Nagasaki was justified because it saved up to 500,000 allied lives by ending the war quickly. "
Rogelio Alcala
ReplyDeleteAmairani Rios
period 3
When the atomic bombs was dropped on Hiroshima and Nagasaki in World War II, the president Harry S. Truman, was justified because dropping the atomic bombs on Japan saved the lives of millions of U.S. soldiers and was the only way to end the war quickly
Rogelio and Amairani,
DeleteGreat, edit to, " When President Harry S. Truman dropped the atomic bombs on Hiroshima and Nagasaki during World War II, he was justified because it saved the lives of up to 1 million American soldiers and was the only way to end the war quickly."
Sydney Zuccolotto and Tiana Salazar
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Thesis Statment
The first atomic bomb that was dropped by Truman in 1945 on Hiroshima and Nagasaki killed more than 30,000 people.This action proved to be justified in result of ending World War II.
Sydney and Tiana,
DeleteChange to "The atomic bombs that were dropped by President Truman in 1945 on Hiroshima and Nagasaki killed more than 120,000 Japanese. This action proved to be justifiable because it ended WWII, sparing the lives of up to a million American and Japanese soldiers."
Abby Jamie, and Cuyler Stearns
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We believe that dropping the atomic bombs, Fat Man and Little Boy, was unjustified because we killed over 100,000 on Nagasaki and Hiroshima combined.
Abby and Cuyler,
DeleteDo not include "we believe" in a thesis statement.
Change to "The dropping of the atomic bombs, Fat Man and Little Boy, on Japan was unjustifiable because they killed over 100,000 Japanese men, women, and children.
The United States was justified in the bombings of Hiroshima and Nagasaki because if they did not it would have cost millions of lives. The main land invasion of Japan would have taken a great amount of American's. The bombings instilled fear in Japan, forving them to surrender.
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Jackie and ANdrew,
DeleteGood work! Edit to, " The United States was justified in the bombings of Hiroshima and Nagasaki because failure to bomb would have resulted in the loss of at least 500,000 American lives. A mainland invasion of Japan would have cost at least 500,000 American lives and up to a million Japanese lives. The atomic bombs instilled fear in Japan, causing them to surrender."
Wyatt Thompson
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Dean Micheals
Period 1
President Truman's motive to bomb the cities of Hiroshima and Nagasaki was imoral but justified because it ended the war with Japan and saved millions of American lives.
Dean, Zeph, and Wyatt,
DeleteGreat, just spell "immoral" correctly.
Devony Trotman & Lauren Fogle
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Yes the Atomic bombing on Japan can be justified. The Japanese were preparing the bloodiest reception ever for the Allies if they invaded Honshu, an island in Japan. Truman would never have been able to hold office if he had a working weapon and choose not to use it. Also, the Alliance between the Western powers and the Soviets was growing weak after the fall of Germany. Harry Truman had to show he was unafraid to use a weapon of mass destruction, especially one that only the United States possessed at that time. This caused the Emperor to surrender and even though 70,000 were killed, World War II was now over.
Devony and Lauren,
DeleteNever begin a thesis with "YEs". Edit to, " The atomic bombings in Hiroshima and Nagasaki are justified because the Japanese were prepared to fight to the death should a land invasion occur and Truman could not pass up the use of such an effective weapon that could end the war so swiftly. "
The United States fairly warned Japan of an upcoming attack and Japan decided not to take action. Truman was justified in dropping the atomic bomb on Hiroshima and Nagasaki because he saved millions of American lives and ended, what could've been, the bloodiest battle in American history.
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ReplyDeleteGreat work! just add to the end for clarification.."should an invasion of Japan had occurred."
Lillian McQuaid
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I think the invasions were justified because warnings were mentioned. I think they were also unjustified because means of violence could have been substituted for more reasonable conflict than killing innocent people. The people in charge of the upcoming attacks could have resolved problems rather than brainwash the nation to murder the enemy.